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 मैले भुलेर पढेको र तिमीले पढेर भुलेको कथा – The Human Stain

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Posted on 11-05-09 1:53 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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**A novice’s attempt on sharing a story – part fiction, part fact, albeit exaggerated, but very close to the heart! If my mere attempt ends up doing injustice to ANYONE or my typos and mediocre vocab irritate the nerve cells, apologies extended in advance!

February, 1996
“burp_aloud@yahoo.com would like to add you to his/her yahoo messenger. Accept / Reject” was what popped up one cold winter night when she logged in to her yahoo messenger. She giggled at the ‘creativity’ of the yahoo id and for some unknown but undeniable reason she clicked ‘Accept’
“Hey Sheila!”
She, “Hey! Who’s this?”
“This is Burpy ”
She, “That I know, but how does Burpy know Sheila?”
“He just knows :D”
She, “???????????????”
………………………………………………..
“Buzz”
“Buzz”
“You there?”
“You backed out already? I heard U were a tough lady”
“OK! If truth is what it takes to keep u from blocking me, we share a common fren & NO, I did not ask her to hook me up with you. I saw you in her pictures and just wondered if we could talk sometimes”
She, “Fair enough”
Burpy, “So, k ma timro sathi banna sakchu?”
She, “:-s”
Burpy, “I don’t know if that’s a yes, but I m sure it’s not a NO”
She, “”
Burpy, “U took a while to reply to my fren’s request there”
She, “I don’t really use these messengers as much. It just so happened that I had to check my emails tonight, but I gtg now”
Burpy, “Will I see U tomorrow again?”
She, “IDK! Bye”
………………………………
Then, she heard her phone ring, caller – Unknown! “Yes??” she answered.  A familiar voice at the other end said, “Hey Babe!” It was her boyfriend! “Hajjjjur”…….
They were thousands of miles apart, yet he never failed to call her every week and every time he called, she still found the same affection he first bestowed to her 6 years ago. She well remembered the tears that trickled down his cheeks, besides his futile attempt to hide them behind his dark ray bans, when she left for the United States almost a year ago. She could still fathom his profound concern about her during their brief talk-times and feel his voice quiver every time they hung up. She always felt that he loved her way more than she actually did! She was blessed to have his angelic figure around her, until that night, which would change her life forever!

------------to be continued
 
Posted on 02-04-10 7:23 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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NEXT PART PLEASE!!!!

 
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NEXT PART PLEASE!!!!

 
Posted on 02-05-10 9:59 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Is it finished? kalomanchhe it was one heck of a writing ...... Awesome! Next part please!

 
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Each part written shorter than the previous, more interestingly though. Nice read so far.
 
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Part VI

November 2009
“Mom, can I come to the movies with you and daddy? Please??” Five years old  Mili came running as she was getting ready. She gave a quick smile at her husband; he could tell she wanted him to answer for her. “Oh sure honey, let’s go get dressed while mom finishes hers and then we will all go have a good time”, he picked little Mili up and walked out of the room.
As Sheila turned back at the mirror to finish her touch ups, she couldn’t help thinking how blessed she was to have such a wonderful family, the most thoughtful and loving of all husbands any wife could ever ask for and their precious bundle of joy! After a tough day at work, she had two beautiful smiles waiting on her that would instantly work to relieve her exhaustion. Her husband was all ears anytime she wanted to share any of her stories, from Gary being promoted, to David retiring, to Michelle having an affair with the IT guy. He could tell if she had a bad day at work without her even looking at him, she need not explain to him that her feet hurt, she need not remind him of her allergy, she need not ask him for his help, he would know about it before she even thought of summoning him; someone who seemed like would never get tired of loving his wife. He was one of the best things that happened to her, her best friend, her guardian and the best person who could have fathered her beautiful child.
“Momma, are u ready yet? Lets go momma, lets go”, she was suddenly interrupted from her epileptic state with her daughter’s ahoy from downstairs. “I m coming honey”, she said as she grabbed her purse and winked to herself at her final glance in the mirror. “You look wonderful tonight”, said her husband as he gave her a quick peck!
“Alright, so we going for dinner and then to the movies, does that sound alright?”
“Yes Daddy”
As they headed to the movies after a great dinner, Sheila could feel a tremendous vibe that night, for some reasons unknown. It just did not seem like it was because of their anniversary alone. She was a successful lady, a great mother and a happy wife now. Gone were the days when her troubled past hurt her emotions. She had wasted enough of her lifetime trying to cherish memories of something/someone long gone. 10 years is indeed a long time! In fact, she now felt she hardly has any time to dwell in that misery. Whenever she went down the memory lanes, she learned only to explore the good part, the part that taught her to respect honesty, the part that taught her to respect love, and the part that taught her to respect devotion. She was rather quite on the road that night, busy thanking her destiny and the great Almighty for what she had been blessed with. She had thrived through thorny roads and now she had everything any modest human would wish for!
As they were about to enter the movie hall, Mili asked for some pop-corn.
“Let me go use the wash-room, while you guys go get some pop-corn. We will meet here”, said her husband. Sheila nodded and took Mili to the theatre hot-dog store.  As they waited in line for their turn for the pop-corn, “Heyyy Stranger” a familiar male voice was heard from behind them. There was a different, but familiar aura in that voice. The voice that once boggled her mind and travelled deep down her heart. Forgiven but not forgotten! She couldn’t abstain from ignoring that call. She instantly turned around, just couldn’t resist!  
“Hie, there”
“How’ve you been Sheila?”
“I m good…….good. How’ve you been?”
“Pretty good myself… been a long while eh?”
That simple statement hit her hard, forced to remember both the good and bad things she went through, the happiness she shared and the sorrows she endured. She felt as if it was trying to scratch the scar that had barely healed, as if it was teasing her, and all that she did to retain the relationship she cherished for life. Over-reacting in a way, justifiable in many!
A gentle grab of her index finger by Mili brought her back to reality. Sheila smiled at her and then looked back at Burpy.
“You alright, Sheila?”
“Yea, yea… I m fine, thanks”
“You know it’s been so long, I almost forgot you”, he paused.
Sheila smiled back and said, “Don’t worry, you will!”
As she said that, she mustered up courage to look directly into his eyes, she saw his eyelids flutter. She felt like it touched him this time, touched him deep down inside. It probably did woo him for the very first and the very last time in both of their lifetime!


*************The story ends, but life continues******

 
Posted on 02-05-10 4:24 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Nice Read.....


Story from the other side of the spectrum !!!!!


Waiting for more stories !!!!


 
Posted on 02-05-10 4:36 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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very nice story  kalomanche

 
Posted on 02-06-10 12:31 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Excellent writing skills very good presentation. 
 
Posted on 02-06-10 2:00 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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I don't have much efficient words to appreciate your work! In simple words, an awesome work with wonderful writing... Good job bro... keep writing, never give up!! Good Luck!!! 
 
Posted on 02-06-10 3:42 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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wow !!!! great narrative....couldn't stop reading till the end.... waiting for other stories to follow.. :)
 
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Interesting..
But you took a decade long jump there. Anything significant happened between 1999 and 2009? How did Sheila end up finding the right man of her life?

Also, I'm sure it is fictional, but yahoo messengers back in 1996-97, and www.sajha.com back then..? Maybe you could push it further to 2000-2001? Ironically, some of the character names you mentioned on Part VI happen to match the ones at my workplace, which I found pretty funny.

Anyway, very good narration. Hope to read more from you, dude.

 
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Posted on 02-06-10 10:01 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Awesome job kalomanchey! hope to read more stories form you! great work!!

 
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Akarshan, it made me feel good that you were actually following even the smallest details of the story. I m sorry to have disappointed you over that decade long jump, and I agree, there were a lot of events that happened during that time period,let's just call it 'Not Significant' between Burpy and Sheila. And yes, the dates are purely fictional.As ironical as the character names are, equally significant they are to the story. I wonder where you work at ;P

For everybody who have been so kind enough to stop by and drop their words of honest encouragement, my mere thank you doesn't even measure a bit up to it. But saying this, I cannot get away just like that without returning back few words of appreciation. This was really my first attempt at TRYING to make a story out of the excerpt from my diary. Thank you all for liking it. Something that I thought would be a big joke really turned out to be a 'good' story, as per you guys'! So thank you ! In the days to come, I will definitely share anything that's worth your time. Appreciate your company in this cherished journey of strange emotions !!

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